Ghyll talk:Kan d'Aire

I enjoyed this one. Am a bit concerned about some of the "flow" - if she's been burnt, and is dead, then she HAS died, and the family HAS gone away. Yet, your first paragraph talks as if she hasn't died. --Morbus Iff 09:25, 5 Aug 2005 (EDT)

I modified the flow so it's all written in the correct tense and everyone who should be dead, is. Thank you. --Trousle Undrhil 23:48, 7 Aug 2005 (EDT)

Well, she did already die and then turn out to be okay once, maybe leaving her in the present tense is the correct thing to do in this case. --Dfaran L'Eniarc 02:20, 8 Aug 2005 (EDT)