Ghyll talk:Kan d'Aire

I enjoyed this one. Am a bit concerned about some of the "flow" - if she's been burnt, and is dead, then she HAS died, and the family HAS gone away. Yet, your first paragraph talks as if she hasn't died. --Morbus Iff 09:25, 5 Aug 2005 (EDT)

I modified the flow so it's all written in the correct tense and everyone who should be dead, is. Thank you. --Trousle Undrhil 23:48, 7 Aug 2005 (EDT)