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I enjoyed this one. --Morbus Iff 09:25, 5 Aug 2005 (EDT)

As did I. I rather hope to have more entries which turn out this good. --Trousle Undrhil 23:21, 14 Aug 2005 (EDT)

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−	I enjoyed this one~~. Am a bit concerned about some of the "flow" - if she's been burnt, and is dead, then she HAS died, and the family HAS gone away. Yet, your first paragraph talks as if she hasn't died~~. --[[User:Morbus Iff\|Morbus Iff]] 09:25, 5 Aug 2005 (EDT)	+	I enjoyed this one. --[[User:Morbus Iff\|Morbus Iff]] 09:25, 5 Aug 2005 (EDT)

−	:I ~~modified the flow so it's all written in the correct tense and everyone who should be dead, is~~. ~~Thank you~~. --[[User:Undrhil\|Trousle Undrhil]] 23:48, 7 Aug 2005 (EDT)	+	:As did I. I rather hope to have more entries which turn out this good. --[[User:Undrhil\|Trousle Undrhil]] 23:21, 14 Aug 2005 (EDT)