Ghyll talk:Carsokian

Right. Have at it then. Hack it apart. There must be plenty of inconsistancies. I'm not quite happy with this entry, but I felt that someone had to dib it and no one else seemed eager, so I did. Mainly, to keep the game flowing. That'll teach me! I'll add the dates to the timeline after all the edits are done. --Doctor Phineas Crank 22:58, 22 Sep 2004 (EDT)

No worries about the timeline - when I go through my copyediting phase, I always update all the other stuff in tune with it. A very quick readthrough (pizza in the oven, no time to factcheck) makes me pause on the Gabson Foye mention: wasn't his future wife hinted at a relation with Bethany, as opposed to him? Or is it just his mother who heard wrong? My memory just may be wrong. --Morbus Iff 23:18, 22 Sep 2004 (EDT)

Well, I've a fair few dates, so I think it's only fair that I do some of that work. And, I'm happy to help out. Now, as to the Bethany/Foye reference.... After re-reading, I think you are correct! It was Siam Sinch that Foye was to wed. I'll make corrections at lunch. --Doctor Phineas Crank 08:20, 23 Sep 2004 (EDT)

One small not-quite-inconsistency that you may nontheless like to deal with: "they have representatives as far as the Evesque Valley and the Sarfelogian Mountains" and "[t]hey also have notable enclaves in the Vale of Serdoch, Alezan and the Baleman neighborhood" is repetitious since the Baleman is in the Evesque Valley (on its northern edge). --Sean B. Palmer 08:11, 25 Sep 2004 (EDT)

Well, I didn't think I was allowed to edit entries after the deadline, but... --Doctor Phineas Crank 10:03, 25 Sep 2004 (EDT)

Yep, it's fine to edit entries after the turn deadline as long as they're either typographical corrections, inconsistency repairs, or other changes which don't affect the semantics of the article and yet are obvious improvements. We've been doing so quite often all across the wiki, especially for typographical changes. Thanks for the correction! --Sean B. Palmer 10:14, 25 Sep 2004 (EDT)